
If you love it
it will be what you wanted
if you give it
you will find it’s what you lost
There is something waiting
something beautiful, waiting
if you’re patient
if you love it
You say you want to see
scenes that feed your eyes
they’re waiting, they’re all around you
if you love them
There is something happening
something beautiful, happening
if you’re open
if you love it
If it’s beauty that you want
then love it, it’s all around you
if you love it
it will be beautiful
It’s all around you…
[2010]
Thanks for reading.
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Tenderness.
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🙂 The power of love is unfathomable.
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I love this Tom. 🙂
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Thank you Hannah! That pleases me a lot. 🙂 Turns out I’ve posted it before but, hell, here it is again…
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Re posting is good idea, I think, I am still pondering on whether to delete my most recent poem, not really a fan of it to be frank, should I keep or delete?
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I quite liked it Hannah but I wish it was more personal. I think poems about that kind of love or passion need to enveloping and intoxicating. Put yourself in the middle of the situation and write from that place, rather than removed or detached from it. If I was writing it (using your language) I might say something like:
This movement…
a beating
binds our pulses
Two halves holding
the ricochet; a rhythm
Heads pounding
with the unstoppable allure
of two-handedly adoring
Could we elope
ticking to the off-beat
metronome melting
Exposed in every sense
These stolen seconds
with her heart beating
with my heart beating
two-handedly we hold
these hands we’re given…
Or something like that 🙂
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Wow, honestly it means a lot for you to give me this advice, honestly constructive criticism is what I would like for people to give. Sometimes I wish I could write like this but brain goes into cryptic mode. Thank you for this Tom. I will re-work it tonight using this as basis. I wish I could talk to more like minded people in person as I do not know many.
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Oh phew, I wasn’t sure if maybe that was a bit rude of me. Essentially; write as passionately and openly as you can. Use the most emotive language you can muster to communicate the feelings. Use the anonymity of ‘the mystery poet’ to say things boldly and surprise yourself. Cryptic has a time and place, but you want the reader to understand you and feel whatever you’re trying to communicate; I like puzzles but sometimes I just want to be kicked in the stomach 😉
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This is really nice😄
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Thank you Shreya. Glad you like it! 🙂
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You’re welcome. I would request you to go through my pieces as well😄
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Absolutely, I will do! 🙂
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It’s still all around us Tom, despite some idiots doing their best to kill it off!
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It is Peter, but can be hard to see on days like these. 😦
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Your poems are beautiful Tom!! 🙏🙏
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Thanks Lia, so great to see a comment from you. Much respect. Thanks for reading.
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Hugs and gratitude for the lovely reply, Tom :))
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Reblogged this on The Reluctant Poet.
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