
Your poem is still young
I have not mastered it just yet
I am constantly revising
still working on the phrasing
Your poem is still young
though its meaning is defined
I only have the final line
those last three certain words
Your poem is still young
each year instils new ideas
your actions suggest more rhymes
and we have many years to go
Your poem is still young
though I recite it constantly
my aim is to perfect it
through every day and night
Your poem is still young
I’d hoped to have found a way to say
to address all of the beauty and joy
there is in you, by now, but no
Your poem is still young
and I am glad to say that
it remains unfinished even now
open on the pages of my favourite notebook
Your poem is still young
still improving with every moment
as we lay together, safe in the flames
until the end of time, I’ll sing;
I love youβ¦
Thanks for reading.
Lovely writing Tom. David.
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Ah, thanks David. That’s kind. It’s nice to hear from you. I hope you’re doing well.
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Such a deep beauty and thereβs a quiet to it as well. π·
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Thank you so much Ellie. I really enjoyed writing this one…
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Hi Tom. Good to see you here! This is like a pledge to a valued one and is a lovely sentiment. The person is a constant inspiration
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Ray
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Hi Ray, likewise I didn’t know you were here too until yesterday and it’s good to connect. And thank you, this one was and is special to me.
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Your writing is lovely, Tom! It’s obvious you write from the heart. Thank you for following Eugi’s Causerie.
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You’re welcome Eugi. And thanks again for the comments, so kind.
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My pleasure!
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Reblogged this on By the Mighty Mumford and commented:
BRAVO—LIVING/CHANGING POETRY!
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Thank you! So exciting to know this poem lives on. life & changing, indeed.
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A lovely poem Tom.
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Aww, thank you. Really pleased you enjoyed.
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Simply sublime my friend.
Love it π€π€
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Thank you! Really appreciate that. π³
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You’re most welcome.
I always love the rhythmical flow of your words ππ€
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Thanks again, stay on my arm you little charmer π The respect is mutual π
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I’m not going anywhere ππ€
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Feels like a heart-stealer. Lovely work!
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